Tone Update...

[khiemtran]

I just rewrote the opening pars of The Silver Bowl from scratch according to the tone I want. It came out word-for-word identical with the very first version.

::Face palm:: This what I get for a year and a half of revision...

Comments

[green-knight.livejournal.com]

Comiserations. There is such as thing as _too good_ a memory.

What was it you liked about it then? What was it you wanted to change

[khiemtran.livejournal.com]

What I liked about it is the same things I like about it now - the mood and the tone. What I tried to change was to add in more description(!), more realism and to try and make the plot more engaging. The latter turned out to be possible at the expense of the tone I wanted, but so far I haven't managed to do it while keeping the tone intact. I'm going to try again, this time concentrating on the tone and only telling the bits that need to come up to illustrate the emotional arc of the opening.