Something about flow...
Jul. 21st, 2005 06:56 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
khiemtranThere's something about "flow" that I haven't quite figured out yet.
I've been playing with a particular passage in my head and trying to figure out why it sounds so much better out of chronological order. It's something about how some sentences are openings and some sentences are endings, and how if I just spit everything out in the order it happened, I get little mismatches where there are endings right after openings, or openings after other openings, or openings that go nowhere.
I suspect that this particular passage is just a bunch of memorable lines in close formation - on their own they look good, but as a group they just don't mesh together, there's just no flow from one line to the next. I think I'm going to have to reorder them so that I can follow a single idea from line to line, and chronological order be damned.
I've been playing with a particular passage in my head and trying to figure out why it sounds so much better out of chronological order. It's something about how some sentences are openings and some sentences are endings, and how if I just spit everything out in the order it happened, I get little mismatches where there are endings right after openings, or openings after other openings, or openings that go nowhere.
I suspect that this particular passage is just a bunch of memorable lines in close formation - on their own they look good, but as a group they just don't mesh together, there's just no flow from one line to the next. I think I'm going to have to reorder them so that I can follow a single idea from line to line, and chronological order be damned.
